I’m right lined up to start the race
the whistle blows,
I’m gone leaving behind no trace
I’m in the lead, can’t look over my shoulder
Someone cries out, his race if over.
Just one more lap and then it’s all over
I round the bend just one last time
I sprint across the finish line
But as I’m taking a victory lap
I notice who had fallen.
WOWzahs!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI have one suggestion, change the last line to " I notice who has fallen" instead of had. If that isn't proper grammer, sorry, but had just doesn't sound right to me.
Holy cow though!!!!! I love the symbolism!
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